Is there anything wrong with my paragraph? Please help, will pick a best answer!!
Question: Is there anything wrong with my paragraph? Please help, will pick a best answer! =)?
Answers:
It is quite good but it is not perfect. One error is that all words should be capitalized in "Committee of Public Safety."
As another answerer stated, it is written informally in places, such as the phrase "fight fire with fire". We also don't know what your assignment was.
However, judging by the caliber of writing that exists out there on the whole... this is way, way above average and any teacher should like it as long as all your sentences are of original construction.
RN and former rocket scientist and former English teacher
There's nothing wrong with your paragraph :) But how good it is depends on a) the level at which you're supposed to be writing, and b) the purpose of the paragraph.
For example, if you're in high school and this is for a history paper - it's great! On the other hand, if this is for a university report, it's a little informal and could use some improvement :)
Just my two cents!
excellent writing..you even have appositives and everything!
There is one thing though that is POSSIBLY wrong id check it.
In the sentence...
When their peaceful pleas went unheard, riots broke out.
Is pleas the correct spelling?
Over all great!(:
To long. Boring. Retarded.
Jk, its ight.
Its a little too long but it's perfect. Your really smart:)
Yes