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Question: I was think of enetring my poem 'Murders regrets' Shown below into a teen writing competition? What is your opinion of it??? Thanks!
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As a child I always felt alone
Full of pressure and immense anger, hating anyone who showed me emotion
Wishing school would end so I could run to the comforts of home
At school I rarely said a word, I never had the notion
The teachers thought I was merely an attention seeker
A spoilt brat with no mind for others
But the everlasting fight inside my mind grew deeper and deeper
I cried confused tears at night under my bed covers
Answers: I was think of enetring my poem 'Murders regrets' Shown below into a teen writing competition? What is your opinion of it??? Thanks!
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As a child I always felt alone
Full of pressure and immense anger, hating anyone who showed me emotion
Wishing school would end so I could run to the comforts of home
At school I rarely said a word, I never had the notion
The teachers thought I was merely an attention seeker
A spoilt brat with no mind for others
But the everlasting fight inside my mind grew deeper and deeper
I cried confused tears at night under my bed covers
This is a very good poem, and it seems you put alot of feeling and thought into it.
Espressing the feeling of a teen, emotional crisis and feeling of dispare...
very good..... and there is a conclussion to what happend when there is action played out with out thought.
submit it! it is the feeling and emothions of a teen challenge!
LUV IT SO MUCH!!! enter ur goin to win l-o-v-e it enter it great poem.!!!
Good but slightly depressing.